I am writing my first poem here. I had written it about 5 years ago when I was in class Seven. Please do rate it and give some advice. Actually, I could not save the whole copy of the poem, while I was arranging my books, I re-found it between them.

£ãÀ¦ããè ½ããù ÀÖãè ¹ãì‡ãŠãÀ


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£ãÀ¦ããè ½ããù ÀÖãè ¹ãì‡ãŠãÀ,
¹ãì‡ãŠãÀ Ôãìã Êããñ ý

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¹ãì‡ãŠãÀ Ôãìã Êããñ ý

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£ãÀ¦ããè ½ããù ÀÖãè ¹ãì‡ãŠãÀ,
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I have written the poem in Hindi, but it is not showing. What should I do?
Oh? I first thought it was in some code language!! :laugh: :laugh:

Treat it as an image file (convert to .jpg) and attach as picture, that way we can view it!

"I am free of all prejudice. I hate everyone equally."
- W. C. Fields :)

yes kalyani is right...her suggestions will help you out....do it faster,so we can read your very first poem.....
A poem is an arrangement of words containing meaning and musicality. Most poems take the form of a series of lines separated into groups

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Dear Friend,

I am not able to read that poem.

Regard's
Bharat.
Hi aman,

I am eager to read your first poem, so arrange it faster....
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